The Weaver

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  1. Sartor

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    THE WEAVER
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    Within the dark and musty room
    Mid spools of yarns and thread
    The shuttle flies across the loom
    Dream fabric to inbed
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    Stacked by the walls are plots and schemes
    Of every shade and hue
    Yarns of emotions for the dreams
    And threads of false and true
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    Within these walls where dreams are born
    The weaver plies his trade
    'Tis here where hearts are broke and torn
    And here were love is made
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    The Weaver sits hunched o'er the loom
    To weave the threads of life
    Emotions floating in the room
    Of happiness and strife
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    So come thou Weaver weave for me
    Your weaving I await
    Let me fulfill my destiny
    And let me meet my fate
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    Sartor
     
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  2. Moonchild

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    Hi! This is so beautiful Sartor.
    Great rhyme and it flowed nicely down the page.
    A very impressive write...loved it!
     
  3. Sartor

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    Child of the moon..........thank you for your kind reply. I am delighted you enjoyed the rhyme.
     
  4. Jer4clarity

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    Sartor,

    You always seem to make rhyme look so easy. And the content is so wonderfully crafted. My Fav:

    Thanks for sharing!

    Jerry
     
  5. Sartor

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    Thanks Jerry......glad you enjoyed the poem.
     
  6. PaintedDiary

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    Dear Sartor,

    One cannot help to get captivated and totally enthralled in your flawless and impeccable rhymes. Simply exquisite. You are a great teacher also. You make me want to try my hand at another rhyme from your teachings. This flowed like a natural spring, and was cool and refreshing. I also love the content, as I love when poets craft poems about things we may not think about or take for granted. Superb!

    Kimberly :)
     
  7. Sartor

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    Thanks Kim..........I will see if I can come up with something, for you and others to try, in the way of a new form of poetry. Soon as I can find the time to mess with it a while.
     
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    This makes me think of a book I have read called "The Lost Girl"
    In your writing I imagined a the weavers monotonies Joy and woe for creation of destruction.
     
  9. Sartor

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    Greetings BT,
    The Weaver is a metaphor for creating creation.
     
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    Hi Kim,
    Can you imagine my surprise at receiving replies from poetry I wrote nine years ago? Amazed, I am simply amazed.
     
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