My Lonely World

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  1. erikestabrook

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    My world turns at the beat of a heart
    my light follows light
    but stops short and below the surface,

    the only temptation in my lonely world
    is every breath she breaths
    the only wish for one simultaneous and then my world would become we

    my lonely world is sustained on life
    but my world makes me think why has it been so long since the plants were green,
    the only thing that blooms here is my own misery.
     
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  2. PaintedDiary

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    Dear Erik,

    This poem is very sad...yet in contrast there is hope...:). It reads like many diaries as well may be feeling the same. What I loved is the contrast..meaning...your world was once green, and once blooming. That leads me to think that once again in time, the plants will be green again, and flowers will color and fragrant your world again. Thank you Erik, for yet again showing us another side of your poetic angle.

    Kimsy! :):curtsey:
     
  3. butchiesmom

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    Such a sad statement, Erik!

    You have, once again, proved why you are a great poet! I read this and could see your longing and sadness here!

    Gail
     
  4. stardust

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    Erik:
    You wrote a sad poem with deep meaning inside a sad heart. Why, sweetie??...
    "A Lonely World" is a good title, which caught my attention, so that I wanted to read it.
    I like it though. You are a young and a good poet. You shouldn´t be sad. You have the whole future ahead of you. I may say BRAVO POET!!
    Thank you, Erik, for sharing your talents with us!!
    Cheers,
    Starry.
     
  5. Flookyyy

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    Such a lovely yet saddening read.
    Good write, but chin up deary!
    Much love :)

    Flook x
     
  6. erikestabrook

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    thanks Kim, gail, starry and Flooky,

    this was just a brief I guess poetic whine
     
  7. booobooo

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    Very Beautifuly Expressed.

    I Turn My World With Every Beat In My Heart And Every Beat Has Only You Breathing In It...
     
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