Come to bed .

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  1. JONATHAN

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    Countless raindrops,
    strumming sad love songs
    on a tin roof .

    Solitude echoes,
    the tragic lack of
    passion mumers .

    Bare skin,
    rendered lethargic
    in the absence of love-sport.

    Empty arms,
    a barren craving
    womb.

    Fill me up now,
    come to bed.
     
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  2. MsJacquiiC

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    Oh boy. Hardly am I ever at a loss for words ((gulp!))
    This piece is scintillating JONATHANJONATHAN - Simply scintillating. The sparks are flying. SIZZLE! Hot.
    When paired with your picture above - these words make me want to weep actually. I'm a big girl though. So let's not weep...

    Anyway - I find this poem arousing in so many ways. Heartbreakingly so actually. I may have more on this later...

    But for now - let me say how I absolutely adore how each stanza presents a standalone, solid visual. I could hear the raindrops; Goosebumps for the love-sport. I wanted to offer a passion murmur ((did you mean 'passion murmur' in your 2nd stanza??? I thought I'd coined that phrase in a poem of mine from a few years back LOL )) Then the last 2 lines.

    HOT!
     
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    Yep Ms J it is Passion mummers and you need to check out the same post in my fb notes .. You would know where Im coming from .Im glad you loved this and Im glad you liked the picture too though I do look terribly squint eyed but I thought it went well with the piece hence here it is .
     
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    Yeah - the picture matches wonderfully. But no on the terribly squint eyed LOL
    You've got BEDROOM EYES :cloud9:
     
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    Is that why I spend most of my free time sleeping or is it the other way around ?
     
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    The other way around as in your free time sleeps on you...?! :LOL:
    Anyway - bedroom eyes are a good thing I'd imagine. I just hate that you're alone in the picture. But rest assured - In my daydream - I joined you :p
     
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    Wow... so powerful. You have a way with making the words very poignant and emphatic. Thanks for sharing.
     
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    Alex .. thank yu and I really appreciate this!
     
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