CINQUAIN...anyone?

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  1. Sartor

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    Cinquain is a short, usually unrhymed poem consisting of twenty-two syllables distributed
    as 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, in five lines. It was developed by the Imagist poet, Adelaide Crapsey.





    Cinquain Sunset
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    Sunset,
    Gold melted red,
    Sinking into the sea,
    Night covers the world with darkness,
    Day ends.
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    Sartor 12-14-03
     
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    Dear Sartor,

    This was simply exquisite, and a fine example of this beautiful poetic form. Tis one of my favorites poetic forms, and the one you shared did wonders for my affective domain, and aesthetic visual domain....thank you. Fantabulous!!! :bravo:

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    Oh no ya don't Painted............you don't get away without writing one here............Heh-heh..........I will be looking for it.
     
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    Pale dawn,
    changing to rose,
    that blooms into blood-red.
    Giving birth to another day
    Morning.
     
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    Great work
    from a poet
    whose words I love to read.
    Well-written, good imagery,
    Sartor!

    And that goes for both of them!
     
  6. MsJacquiiC

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    And thee?
    Sunset, tea-glee
    Fabulosity? And
    left me longing such poetry:
    Sartor.

    Untitled piece about the one who actually dared MsJacquiiC ;)
    Nice form! ALSO - thought I'd make it kinda rhyme...

    JAcquii.
     
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    Smiles for both of you.......Altree and Jacquii. Thanks for your cinquains. I enjoyed them.

    full Moon
    riding the clouds
    pale green her beauty glows
    reflecting glory of her Love
    the Sun
     
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    Dear Sartor,

    You make the Cinquain so effortless.....Ms Tree's and Ms Jacquii's are beautiful as well. Whew...don't know if I can measure up to you three!!!! You three put me to shame!!! I have a hard time trying to write Haiku's!!! LOL....


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  9. Sartor

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    Painted.........of course you can (I've seen your writing) Just count the syllables and make it adhere to some idea.

    Painted
    can write a poem
    that makes it come alive
    and lets one find the truth therin
    with ease
     
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    Thank you so much Sartor for your kind words and poem. With that before me, I had to try, so here it goes........Another Saxy Poem....hope I did it correctly, lol.


    Saxophone Love IX - Cinquain

    Sweet wind
    exhales from brass
    notes dance la reverie
    flesh pulsating, as I murmur
    his name:sax:
     
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    Slumber,
    dancing maiden,
    begat with all I seek,
    stroked in consuming indigo,
    goodnight.
     
  12. Sartor

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    Painted...........You did just as good as I knew you could.....see how easy it was once you defined the form and wrote it.

    Benny.............a good cinquain as well


    Recalled
    old memories
    living in my scrapbook
    that gently brush across my mind
    photos
     
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    Thank you Sartor, as I try again........

    Tis life
    my diary
    a mystique filigree
    treasured memoirs holds dear to my
    ripe pen
     
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    NICE!

    suaveness
    I'm loving her
    smooth sinuous caress:
    Mistress of all enduring - yeah
    Poesy! :blush2:

    Jacquii.
     
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    Woooohhhhhooooo Ms Jacquii that was Scrumpshalicious!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Kim ;)
     
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    At last
    the end has come,
    no longer shall I see,
    the bird of love fly over me.
    Its free.
     
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    unveil
    husk covered heart
    love fades into flummox
    broken jigsaw puzzle pieces
    falling​
     
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    NICE writes YAWL!
    loving the word scrumpshalicious :yay:

    unveiled
    the lust-filled love
    such daunting, lovely act
    opera of the most sweet heart
    Toni


    (tribute for Toni Braxton's song - Just Be A Man About It)
     
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    And now
    the end is near
    the fog shall clear away
    and you'll be mine again today
    I pray
     
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    Jacquii
    phenomenal
    parlayed poetic dreams
    her treasures gleen with the typed word
    poesy
     
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